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Adrian's avatar

Would be cool to get the full story.

L.O.Campbell's avatar

I am glad you felt the pull of it. I was interested in staying inside the moment rather than widening into backstory, letting atmosphere and waiting do the narrative work. Thank you for reading so closely. 🙏

Adrian's avatar

Totally get it. But still. It was so well done, I wanted to see more.

L.O.Campbell's avatar

Hi, check your DM’s I sent you the preceding poem.

Adrian's avatar

Cool, thanks! I just saw. I’m a bit tied up but I’ll give it a read later today and let you know my thoughts.

William Slayton's avatar

Beautiful. So interesting that the dot simulates a heartbeat. Will be thinking about this next time I use chat.

L.O.Campbell's avatar

Thank you, I am glad that detail lingered. The dot acting like a heartbeat was meant to feel quietly unsettling, a mechanical pulse standing in for something human.

William Slayton's avatar

Yes I pretty sure that Chat GPT has a dot that beats like that. So interesting to understand that they are trying to make us feel like it is something human. I really enjoy reading your work and also the work that you endorse—appreciate your generosity.

Crafts English Workshops's avatar

This is incredibly sharp.

The way technology becomes the stage for absence — not connection — feels precise and unsettling in the best way.

That status dot as proof of occupancy, not intimacy, is a brilliant move.

Clean, intelligent, and emotionally exact.

You understand the language of machines and what they fail to carry.

Really strong work.

L.O.Campbell's avatar

Thank you for such a precise reading. I wanted to let the interface itself do the emotional work, so that technology becomes the setting in which absence is staged rather than explained. The status dot mattered to me as a neutral signal that acquires emotional charge through waiting. I’m overjoyed that tension and restraint came through. 🛜

Keiichiro Iwamoto's avatar

It feels so quiet and lonely, like two people almost tuching but never really meeting. The little lights on the screen cary all the weight of connection.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

Love that ending!

Izabella 💌's avatar

“Seeing that green light was like watching a flare from a shore I would never reach. It did not mean connection. It only meant occupancy.” This was just gorgeous!!! Masterpiece ✨

L.O.Campbell's avatar

That means a great deal, thank you. The flare image mattered to me because it suggests hope and isolation at once, light that signals without delivering. I am so pleased you read its meaning. 🤍🙏

Nicholaus Bairley's avatar

"We were two transmissions routed through the same cold wires, synced to the millisecond and separated by everything."

Love how this encapsulates the lack of humanity in our modern communication.

L.O.Campbell's avatar

Thank you Nicholaus, for noticing that line in particular. I wanted the language to feel technical enough to drain the warmth from it, to show how synchrony can still be a form of distance. I’m glad it carried that tension. 🙏

Ray1on1's avatar

That feeling of being “present but not connected” is so familiar, and you put it into words so cleanly. Beautiful work.

L.O.Campbell's avatar

Thank you. I wanted the language to remain plain enough that the disconnection could speak for itself, without being overdramatised. I’m glad that sense of presence without arrival came through. 🙏

Maureen Doallas's avatar

Marvelous piece.

I think of how avatars are given human names, how gamers assume the trappings of the characters they are role-playing, how romances between humans and bots flare, the bots becoming substitute for all that is missing "in real life" (I put IRL in quotes because for some users the technology is the more real). And I think, too, of the ways technology is perverted to do harm (one of the best examples being X's Grok). In that "dangerous quiet" in the moment before "connection" is made, that's where choice can be made; it's too late once the tiny light of "on" turns green.

L.O.Campbell's avatar

Thank you for such a searching response. I was very interested in that suspended instant before contact, the charged stillness where projection, choice, and fear are all active at once. The green light matters precisely because it feels small and decisive, a threshold rather than a climax. I am grateful you read the poem into that wider technological and ethical field. 🤍🙏

Dawnithic's avatar

Campbell, you capture the loneliness wired into our digital selves so deeply. The green dot pulses like a heartbeat that never reaches the other side. I love how absence is made tangible through signals, fans, and screens. You’ve made waiting feel like a presence, yet one that stays just out of grasp.

L.O.Campbell's avatar

Thank you for such a careful reading. I wanted those domestic and technological signals to make absence almost tactile, so that waiting becomes a kind of atmosphere rather than a gap. I am grateful you stayed with the poem long enough to feel that pressure. 🤍🙏

Brian Kirkpatrick - Poetry's avatar

"synced to the millisecond and separated by everything" Brilliant!

L.O.Campbell's avatar

Thank you, that line was doing a lot of structural work, trying to hold precision and estrangement in the same breath. I am glad it landed. 🙏

NaYama/Netcentrum Poems/Poetry's avatar

Wow, that is really good

L.O.Campbell's avatar

Thank you very much, I appreciate you taking the time to read it, it means a lot. 🙏

Jeanne Vessantra's avatar

We are lost, we are lost, will we ever be found?

So cold-driven yet so divine.

Human connection is just like a drowning pool-

On the surface, we reach, we gasp, we ache.

Inside, there is a void, a tearing, a whisper

That urges us to hold what we have.

Aaliya's avatar

What a poignant reflection on how technology can both connect and distance us.

André's avatar

Promising company while withholding contact ... That's the problem, isn't it ? So many people I'd love to take into my arms ... but the magnificent machine makes it impossible...

Of course, fusing of the minds does not require proximity ... a new world, hey !?

Thanks for the writing ... I enjoy it

The Music of My Life by Baron's avatar

"The cursor blinked in the empty text box, a steady, judgemental heartbeat." this resonated with me deeply